Words To Live By

The worst draft in the world is infinitely better than the best unwritten story.

Saturday, September 24, 2011

Update: The Seventh Seal

Bergman is a hell of a filmmaker. Yes. But his pictures are so heavy, so cerebral. I've decided to make The Seventh Seal more accessible to American audiences.

The Seventh Seal

The night had brought little relief from the heat, and at dawn a hot gust of wind blows across the colorless sea. The KNIGHT, Antonius Block, lies prostrate on some spruce branches spread over the fine sand. His eyes are wide-open and bloodshot from lack of sleep.



Nearby his squire JONS is snoring loudly. He has fallen asleep where he collapsed, at the edge of the forest among the wind-gnarled fir trees. His open mouth gapes towards the dawn, and unearthly sounds come from his throat. At the sudden gust of wind, the horses stir, stretching their parched muzzles towards the sea. They are as thin and worn as their masters.


The KNIGHT has risen and waded into the shallow water, where he rinses his sunburned face and blistered lips. JONS rolls over to face the forest and the darkness. He moans in his sleep and vigorously scratches the stubbled hair on his head. A scar stretches diagonally across his scalp, as white as lightning against the grime.


The KNIGHT returns to the beach and falls on his knees. With his eyes closed and brow furrowed, he says his morning prayers. His hands are clenched together and his lips form the words silently. His face is sad and bitter. He opens his eyes and stares directly into the morning sun which wallows up from the misty sea like some bloated, dying fish. The sky is gray and immobile, a dome of lead. A cloud hangs mute and dark over the western horizon. High up, barely visible, a seagull floats on motionless wings. Its cry is weird and restless. The KNIGHT'S large gray horse lifts its head and whinnies. Antonius Block turns around.


Behind him stands a man in black. His face is very pale and he keeps his hands hidden in the wide folds of his cloak.


KNIGHT
Who are you?



MITCH
Mitch Skorrvlünd. Jesus, we were roommates in college for three years, don't you remember me? Do you want some Chapstick?


All I've done is change the character of Death to Mitch, the Knight's old buddy.  You see how this minor change makes the whole film seem more lively, more human?  I might also make the Knight's horse a vintage Plymouth Duster, because horses are also kind of weird.  They could meet at the airport.  The point is, if George Lucas can add "Nooooooooooo" to one shot in Return of the Jedi and reinvent the whole picture, surely Bergman is due for some improvement.

The Hero's Journal

Sometimes I think there's an overarching formula for successful storytelling out there and we just haven't quite hit it yet.

When Christopher Vogler wrote a 7-page brief describing the 'hero's journey' or 'Monomyth' for film execs, there was a revolution in storytelling for movies.  Suddenly, nobody had to read Joseph Campbell's somewhat turgid The Hero with a Thousand Faces, which in any case had been around since 1949 without attracting a great deal of attention (except a brief post-Star Wars vogue).  There was the mythic formula, 7 pages, ready to use.  


Suddenly every movie was a hero's journey and you could make a drinking game out of identifying the elements: "the refusal of the call!  Drink!"  "The crossing of the first threshold!  Drink!"  This was a step forward, in that clueless development people suddenly had at least a vague outline for getting a narrative in between the car crashes and gunfights.


But there were some serious drawbacks to this approach.  First of all, nobody knows why the hero's journey contains its particular components.  The Meeting With The Goddess?  What?  Apotheosis?  Didn't he marry Jackie Kennedy?  The trouble with any formula is it encourages orthodoxy, unless the storyteller consciously challenges the conventions within the formula itself.  


One reason The Matrix worked so well is it is an extremely self-aware, almost campy retelling of the Monomyth story.  When the Wachowski Brothers decide to play around with the formula along the way, it's surprising and fresh.  The reason Willow was such a pile of shit, by contrast, is because it's the hero's journey told in Mad Libs.  They just plugged fantasy elements into the structure and said, "look, we have the perfect post-Star Wars mega-hit."  It was so slavishly deliberate and unsurprising, it hurt to watch.


Because nobody has seen Willow since its second screening in theaters, here's a sample of its expository style.  Only watch the first minute and a half, unless you're a connoisseur of cinematic clichés.  They might as well have the old wizard character say "I am the Wise Man; here is a powerful talisman as mentioned in Stage 4 of The Memo."


Contrast that with essentially the same scene in The Matrix. 


But here's the thing: audiences know the hero's journey now.  They see it coming.  It has suffocated a great deal of imagination in filmmaking.  (There has also been a tendency to celebrate male heroes over female ones, because the Monomyth is male-oriented; this is another subject for another time, but it's a problem.)


I think we need to back up and look at why the hero's journey works, and what it does, rather than simply run it like a story machine.  I'm not answering my own question here, but it's something to think about.  Why do we like the protagonist of humble origins who turns out to be the chosen one?  Why do we like him to have wise mentors, and to receive useful talismans?  Why must he suffer some kind of crisis of faith before his ultimate triumph?


Sometimes I think it's straightforward wish-fulfillment, because these are significant desires in our own lives.  We all crave success and admiration.  We need guidance from people who want us to succeed, and genuinely know how to help us do it.  We prefer to have tools of some kind to aid our efforts.  We want a purpose in life (the quest) and we want to discover we are someone special and different along the way.


But there's more to it than that.  I wonder if the Monomyth is a variation on a deeper, larger idea, something to do with telling the shape of a typical human life.  There's our transition from parochial infancy through mentored adolescence, the discovery of strengths and portents in our lives as we approach adulthood -- and then the main event, our adult lives: a series of failures, victories, loves, hates, unions and betrayals, all overshadowed by the increasing presence of mortality.  The whole shebang ends before death, generally, for fictional purposes, with an ultimate state which could be said to be transformation into the wise mentor we met at the beginning.


Maybe I'll write a 7-page memo on the subject.

Wednesday, September 21, 2011

Got The Pump Going

Spent the last few weeks writing the first draft of a novel.  Wrote it just as fast as ever I could.  Now I can write a proper draft on the verso.